Jerry's Comments

Lazy7 June 2013 00:05

This is a great idea and sounds like a awesome fan-fic in the making. Really captures the imagination of the reader with the little plot summary.

Lazy7 June 2013 00:17

Awesome story, I think that the ideas in this story are very well developed and this will be a good piece of writing once the grammar and spelling has been fixed.

Lazy7 June 2013 00:19

The idea of taking a fairy tale and turning it into something that is so much more really caught my attention in this story. Great use of POV as the first person really made it feel more real.

Lazy 7 June 2013 00:22

Thanks for the comment, I am still planning on how the plot unfolds itself so even I am not sure where the story is going.
Developing it will be my first priority.

Lazy7 June 2013 00:26

I agree on the idea of fixing the grammar and spelling. The story is full of potential since the movie was so great. Personally I loved it.