Showing posts with label fanfiction. Show all posts
Showing posts with label fanfiction. Show all posts

Thursday, 16 May 2013

Amanda's Comments


1. http://ff20132.blogspot.co.nz/2013/03/mollys-fan-fiction-plan.html
"This has really captivated my imagination... it's so mysterious and thrilling! This storyline has a lot of interesting possibilities, can't wait to see what path you take!"
2. http://ff20132.blogspot.co.nz/2013/03/gemmas-fan-fiction-draftplan.html
"Fantastic story Gemma, I found it incredibly engaging and entertaining. And I also agree with Leigh and Shelah, just needs the grammar fixed and it'll be perfect!"
3. http://ff20132.blogspot.co.nz/2013/03/shelahs-fan-fiction-draftplan.html
"Absolutely adorable story Shelah, a great pleasure to read, it's humorous and very entertaining. You write in such a way that the reader can visualise everything so vividly. I especially love the ending. Perfect spelling and grammar. Well done!"
4. http://ff20132.blogspot.co.nz/2013/03/tamas-fan-fiction-draftplan.html
"Excellent poem. I like how it already sets the slightly sinister and off-beat feel of your plot. I can't agree more with Shelah, I too love the psychological dark side of Alice in Wonderland and the deep seated feeling of unease and that all is not as it should be. The fantastic visual nature of Alice in Wonderland seems to lend itself to being used as metaphors for drug use, hallucination and psychological uncertainty... I think this has the potential to be a brilliant story, can't wait to read it!"
5. http://ff20132.blogspot.co.nz/2013/03/jerry-changs-fan-fiction-draftplan.html
"This sounds fascinating, a really good idea... Not sure where the story is going but it's obviously still in the early stages... Look forward to seeing how you develop it."


Thursday, 7 March 2013

Shelah's Final Fan Fiction


Gunter the Ice Emperor


A dark, frigid day begins once more in the dreaded east of the Land of Ooo. The Ice Mountains, majestic and cold, stare silently at their boisterous inhabitants.
The Ice Kingdom

"Gunter!" a nasally voice wheedled, "Where is my crown?! You know I can't do magic without my crown! Oh, where did it go?!"

"Wenk." Gunter replied.

"What do you mean you don't know?!" the voice demanded.

Gunter stared unblinkingly at his master and replied once more, "Wenk."

"Grah! I. Am. The. Ice. King. I need my crown because kings wear crowns and I am the Ice King!" The Ice King bellowed with a snarl on his blue-skinned, white bearded face.

"...Wenk." 


"Gunter! You're not helping! Just, go look for my crown or something!" 

At his master's command, Gunter the penguin exited the ice cave. As he quietly waddled away from the whines and complaints of the Ice King, Gunter's expression darkened. 
He slowed next to a small opening not far from his master's dwelling, an opening just big enough to fit Gunter himself. 

He entered the small cave, and spoke as he waddled towards the centre, "Wenk. Wenk wenk wenk. Wenk." 

His master was truly a fool. To bestow himself with the title of 'Ice King', how ridiculous. That blue idiot doesn't even know the true power of the crown. No, he, Gunter, would show him. He would show everyone! The Land of Ooo will proclaim him as their new ruler! 

Gunter stopped at the centre of the little ice cave, "Wenk." 

There it was, his one way ticket to ultimate power. The Ice King's crown. His crown. Gunter's  crown. It was beautiful. With it's three-pointed golden stature and blood-red rubies, it was perfect. So powerful, so persuasive; and it was all his.

"Wenk. Wenk wenk." He would rule with this. No more will his people be at the mercy of the blue buffoon. His first step would be to eradicate the Ice King. Then that irritating human and his yellow dog. Loser Finn and Thick-headed Jake. From there it would be too easy. 

Gunter reached for the crown resting on the make shift podium. It was time to start the plan. Today is the day, that he, the Ice Emperor, is born!
Gunter's true nature

Flippers slightly shaking in anticipation, Gunter touched the sides of the gleaming crown. Yes, yes! Oh, he could feel it. Such delicious power! All his!

He tightened his grip on the crown and proceeded to lift it, Gunter grinned.

As he gently raised the crown, the unthinkable yet slightly expected happened. Clang! Gunter gaped in shock, "...wenk?"

What? What just happened? The crown fell? No, it slipped. Yes, it slipped. Of course. How silly of him. Right, he just needed to pick it up again. No big deal. Beginners nerves. Right.

Gunter reached for the crown again, a determined glint in his big penguin eyes. However, it slipped once more. Clang!

"Wenk!" 

Gunter angrily grabbed the crown with his flippers, yet it slipped again. Clang! Grab, clang, grab, clang. Gunter had inevitably started a pattern of grabbing and dropping the crown. Grab! Clang! Grab! Clang!

His anger and frustration grew steadily. A manic expression had fixed itself on his face. Poor Gunter, his lack of opposable digits, or any digits at all, would be his biggest obstacle.

"WENK! WENK!" Gunter honked.

What is this?! Why can't I hold the crown?! I am your new master, crown! Let me hold you! 

As Gunter continued his struggle within the cave, a second presence had taken notice of the rowdy noises.

"What is that noise? Gunter!" the Ice King called. He had been drawn to the boisterous sounds and had decided to investigate. "Gunter! What is going on here?"

The Ice King lowered himself to the his knees and crawled towards the opening. 

"I can't believe I'm doing this." he muttered, "Gunter!" 

The Ice King shoved his head in the opening and gasped loudly at what he saw. Gunter froze. He gradually turned to the passage. The Ice King and Gunter silently gazed at each other.

Gunter's thoughts swiftly turned into panic driven drivel. How? How did he find me?! I was so careful, damn this fool! I must cover my tracks! I need an excuse! Damn it all to the icy pits of penguin hell!

Meanwhile, the Ice King's thoughts were filled with a much more simple tune. Is that my crown? My glorious crown! Oh, come to daddy!

As the Ice King's eyes grew larger and sparkled with delight, Gunter greeted his 'master', "Wenk."

"You did find my crown Gunter, didn't you? Oh, you are such a good penguin!" the Ice King cooed, "Yes, you are." 

Gunter decided to play along, for now. He reached for the crown and tapped it with his flipper, "Wenk."

"Yes that is my crown! Now, Gunter, I'm going to go back out and you're going to pass it to me okay? Be a good boy now Gunter!" the Ice King instructed and proceeded to pull his head out of the entrance.

"Come on Gunter, give daddy his crown." the Ice King repeated.

Gunter stared at the crown, with it's golden stature and gleaming rubies. He would give it up for now, he would wait until he had the opportunity for the crown to be placed upon his head. The crown's true and rightful place was never with that blue sad sack. But it was the 'Ice King's crown', for now. Yes...for now, he would be the dutiful penguin servant.
Gunter and The Ice King - a happy ending?

Gunter blinked and slapped the crown until it slid outside. He followed and was greeted with the sight of the Ice King dancing and hooting, all the while showering his crown with kisses. 

Gunter grimaced, "Wenk." Loathsome blue twit.



The End.

Amanda's Final Fan Fiction

PAIN


Karen looked around.

Coloured lights flashing. Loud music blaring. Bodies moving rhythmically to the beat. She felt hot. Flushed. Her heart beat wildly in her chest. She felt clammy. Thirsty. Her head hurt. Her teeth kept grinding together and her tongue stuck to the roof of her mouth. She couldn't swallow, her nose and back of her throat were numb, as were her front teeth.

She was fidgety. She wanted another hit. Another line. Anything to make her forget. What was it that he had said? She couldn't remember just now. The cocaine made her numb.

THINK! She couldn't. Her hands were twitching, palms sweating. She looked at the table. Several perfect 6cm white lines of powder neatly in a row and a rolled up dollar bill. She took the make shift straw and put it in her nose, snorting two of the white lines.

Karen van der Beek
Ah, that's better. Her heart began to race even more. She could no longer sit still. She looked to Derek. Derek who she only met tonight. Derek who she was relying on to take her pain away. But he was too busy chatting to someone over the back of the seat in the booth next to them.

Hank was gone. Becca too. She was ruined. Her world torn apart. It was too much for her to bare. How did it come to this?

It was Hank who was out of control. Hank who was the addict. Drugs, sex, alcohol. That was Hank's thing. But then he got clean. He got sane. And he got himself as far away from her as possible, taking their daughter with him. Back to New York. Back home. Back to where they first started, leaving her all alone in L.A.

Karen needed a drink. Something to take the edge off. She grab the bottle of champaign from the ice bucket next to the table, poured herself a glass and quickly sculled it back. She did this a second time, feeling the warmth of alcohol spread through her.

She never meant to go this far. She never meant to loose herself like this. She just wanted to show Hank what he was doing to her and Becca and give him back some of his own. She only meant to go out, go wild for a week or two until Hank came to his senses. And to that end she had certainly succeeded.

He went cold turkey, sobered up, changed his life. And the irony? She couldn't stop. She had become the addict.

It was just such a good antidote to the pain. All the pain and emotional turmoil that life had put her through.

But now she had lost them both. And herself.

AARRGH! She shook her head. Stop thinking about it! She stood up, unsteady on her feet, not knowing where she was going. She suddenly had to get out of this place. She was beginning to feel claustrophobic, the walls had started to close in. But she didn't want to leave. She didn't want to be alone.

YOU ARE ALONE! She told herself. SO UTTERLY AND MISERABLY ALONE. A VICTIM OF YOUR OWN GAME PLAYING. A GAME YOU PLAYED AND LOST!

Becca and Hank Moody
Karen stumbled to the bathroom. She need some peace. She was feeling incredibly nauseous. She went to the mirror and stared at her reflection. Her mascara had run. She looked like shit. Her nose had begun to bleed. FUCK I'M A MESS! I MESSED UP! OH FUCK!

She turned on the tap and tried to clean up herself up. Her nausea was getting worse and her head was dizzy. She clutched onto the edges of the sink, put her head down watching the water whirlpool down the plughole. The ends of her hair were getting wet. She didn't care.

Suddenly the room started to spin and Karen threw up. Beads of sweat formed all over her body. She tried to keep herself propped up on the sink, but she couldn't hold her weight. She slid to the floor as she vomited again, her body trembling.

She curled up into a tight ball on the floor. She couldn't breath. Her nose was bleeding profusely. “Help! Somebody please..” She tried to to call out, but her voice came out a whisper. It's all she could muster.

She began silently sobbing to herself. Images of Hank floated through her mind. There had been so much love, once. There had always been laughter. She always believed they would get back together, grow old together, once Hank sorted his shit out.

And Becca, oh God, beautiful Becca, the product of their love. She had always thought she'd been a good mother to her. They were each other's anchor while Hank was off sleeping around, partying, neglecting them.

But none of that mattered now. Karen was writhing on the bathroom floor, shaking, frothing at the mouth. She realised she had overdosed. But she was helpless. She had tunnel vision, the room was darkening.

She began to loose consciousness. Suddenly, she remembered what Hank had said before he left.

"I can't bare to watch you be who I was. I have failed you. You have failed me. We only hurt each other. So we obviously can't be together. Ever.”

Karen's heart ached with pain. Everything went black. Her body stilled as a single tear fell down her cheek.

THE END

Shelah's Fan Fiction Draft/Plan

Been tossing around some ideas for my fan fiction piece and as silly as it sounds I'll be dabbling with the cartoon series Adventure Time with Finn and Jake. Lighthearted, fun, good morals; and I can twist it enough for my own use.




I'll be doing a fan fiction which is sligthly AU since Gunter in my story will be a lot more developed in terms of character. I'll be following the series by doing an 'episode' - which will be my fan fiction piece.

Title: Gunter the Ice Emperor
Plot: Gunter's attempt to rule the Land of Ooo does not go as planned.
Characters: Protagonist - The Ice King    Antagonist - Gunter
POV: 3rd person
Style and Genre: GenFic, Humour
Rating: T (Teens)

List of Fan Fiction I found that may be more or less related to mine;

  1. Adventure Time: The Awakening of Heroes Summary: The Lich is back and his only purpose is to take revenge over the land of Ooo. There's only one way to stop him from destroying the world; eight ancient weapons must be gathered but only true heroes can unleash their real power. With his friends' help, Finn sets out on a quest that will change their lives forever…
  2. Adventure Awaits Summary: It's Finn's birthday, but due to the unexpected arrival of their brother Jermaine, Marceline's field trip, Bubblegum's surprise party and a surprise kidnapping, Jake wonders if he will ever be able to give his gift to Finn.
  3. Magic Trials Summary: Saving princesses has always been part of Finn and Jake's job. So what happens when Marceline gets captured? Can they save her? Or is she the ones who needs to save them? And what chaos will come if Magic Man is involved?
  4. Revenge Summary: Finn accidentally lets it slide that Marceline is a queen. Now the dreaded Ice King wants to marry her, but is there some sort of catch to this marriage? Is it all a part of someone elses plan for revenge? 
  5. Blood Ties Summary: After Marceline comes down with a rare disease known as the vampire flu, a mysterious doctor shows up saying he can cure Marceline. Unable to trust this mysterious doctor, Bubblegum looks into the disease and realizes it can kill Marceline if they don't find the cure. Finn and Jake race against the clock as they go out in search of the cure's location. Will they succeed? 

Draft:

A dark, frigid day begins once more in the dreaded east of the Land of Ooo. The Ice Mountains, majestic and cold, stare silently at their boisterous inhabitants.

"Gunter!" a nasally voice wheedled, "Where is my crown?! You know I can't do magic without my crown! Oh, where did it go?!"

"Wak." Gunter replied.

"What do you mean you don't know?!" the voice demanded.

Gunter stared unblinkingly at his master and replied once more, "Wak."

"Grah! I. Am. The. Ice. King. I need my crown because kings wear crowns and I am the Ice King!" The Ice King bellowed with a snarl on his blue-skinned, white bearded face.

"...Wak." 


"Gunter! You're not helping! Just, go look for my crown or something!" 

At his master's command, Gunter the penguin exited the ice cave. As he quietly waddled away from the whines and complaints of the Ice King, Gunter's expression darkened. 
He slowed next to a small opening not far from his master's dwelling, an opening just big enough to fit Gunter himself. 

He entered the small cave, and spoke as he waddled towards the centre, "Wak. Wak wak wak. Wak." 

His master was truly a fool. To bestow himself with the title of 'Ice King', how ridiculous. That blue idiot doesn't even know the true power of the crown. No, he, Gunter, would show him. He would show everyone! The Land of Ooo will proclaim him as their new ruler! 

Gunter stopped at the centre of the little ice cave, "Wak." 

There it was, his one way ticket to ultimate power. The Ice King's crown. His crown. Gunter's  crown. It was beautiful. With it's three-pointed golden stature and blood-red rubies, it was perfect. So powerful, so persuasive; and it was all his.

"Wak. Wak wak." He would rule with this. No more will his people be at the mercy of the blue buffoon. His first step would be to eradicate the Ice King. Then that irritating human and his yellow dog, Finn and Jake. From there it would be too easy. 

Gunter reached for the crown resting on the make shift podium. It was time to start the plan. Today is the day, that he, the Ice Emperor, is born!

Flippers slightly shaking in anticipation, Gunter touched the sides of the gleaming crown. Yes, yes! Oh, he could feel it. Such delicious power! All his!

He tightened his grip on the crown and proceeded to lift it, Gunter grinned.

As he gently raised the crown, the unthinkable yet slightly expected happened. Clang! Gunter gaped in shock, "...wak?"

What? What just happened? The crown fell? No, it slipped. Yes, it slipped. Of course. How silly of him. Right, he just needed to pick it up again. No big deal. Beginners nerves. Right.

Gunter reached for the crown again, a determined glint in his big penguin eyes. However, it slipped once more. Clang!

"Wak!" 

Gunter angrily grabbed the crown with his flippers, yet it slipped again. Clang! Grab, clang, grab, clang. Gunter had started a pattern of inevitably grabbing and dropping the crown. Grab! Clang! Grab! Clang!

His anger and frustration grew steadily. A manic expression had fixed itself on his face. Poor Gunter, his lack of opposable digits, or any digits at all, would be his biggest obstacle.

"WAK! WAK!" Gunter honked.

What is this?! Why can't I hold the crown?! I am your new master, crown! Let me hold you! 

As Gunter continued his struggle within the cave, a second presence had taken notice of the rowdy noises from the little cave.

"What is that noise? Gunter!" the Ice King called. He had been drawn to the boisterous sounds and had decided to investigate. "Gunter! What is going on here?"

The Ice King lowered himself to the his knees and crawled towards the opening. 

"I can't believe I'm doing this." he muttered, "Gunter!" 

The Ice King shoved his head in the opening and gasped loudly at what he saw. Gunter hearing the gasp froze. He turned to opening. The Ice King and Gunter stared.

Gunter's thoughts turned to panic driven drivel. How? How did he find me?! I was so careful, damn this fool! I must cover my tracks! I need an excuse! Damn it all to the icy pits of penguin hell!

Meanwhile, the Ice King's thoughts were filled with a much more simple tune. Is that my crown? My glorious crown! Oh, come to daddy!

As the Ice King's eyes grew larger and sparkled with delight, Gunter greeted his 'master', "Wak."

"You did find my crown Gunter, didn't you? Oh, you are such a good penguin!" the Ice King cooed, "Yes, you are." 

Gunter decided to play along, for now. He reached for the crown and tapped it with his flipper, "Wak."

"Yes that is my crown! Now, Gunter, I'm going to go back out and you're going to pass it to me okay? Be a good boy now Gunter!" the Ice King instructed and proceeded to pull his head out of the entrance.

"Come on Gunter, give daddy his crown." the Ice King repeated.

Gunter stared at the crown, with it's golden stature and gleaming rubies. He would give it up for now, he would wait until he had the opportunity for the crown to be placed upon his head. The crown's true and rightful place was never with that blue sad sack. But it was the 'Ice King's crown', for now. Yes, for now, he would be the dutiful penguin servant.

Gunter blinked and slapped the crown until it slid outside. He followed and was greeted with the sight of the Ice King dancing and hooting, all the while showering his crown with kisses. Disgusting blue idiot.

The End.










Amanda's Fan Fiction Draft/Plan


I have decided to do my fan fiction based on one of my favourite TV shows, Californication.

Hank Moody

A short summary of the show:
"When fast-living novelist Hank Moody left the literary haunts of New York for the pleasure seeking splendors of L.A, he thought he'd have fame, fortune and the love of a good woman. Now his personal life is in shambles, his career is on the brink of self-destruction and he still just can't stop yielding to every temptation. Golden Globe® winner David Duchovny stars in the Showtime Original series that takes you on a wild, witty, and sexy ride in the California fast lane." (Showtime)
See here for more information about the show.

Becca Moody
Here are some examples of fan fiction based on this show currently on the web:

1) Your Reflection Should Not Be Of Me by Caylee Elizabeth
    Hank tries to deal with the dreaded possibility of Becca dropping out of school.

ANALYSIS: This story really captures and stays true to the established characters (Hank & Becca Moody, Karen van der Beek) in Californication, using the language style that really defines the feel of the show. Unfortunately I feel there is a lack of writer creativity or originality as it is almost EXACTLY what happens in Episode 1, Season 6, the only difference being Hank waking up in an unknown location and ringing Karen to tell her about Becca (instead he wakes up on a couch with his family and friends around him who are there to stage an intervention); but we've seen this type of scenario again and again in the series that it is now a cliche to Hank's character. Even so, it is still an engaging and enjoyable read that is well constructed and technically correct (i.e. spelling/grammar).

2) Don't Let Me Be Misunderstood by Siobhan Duffy
    Karen is dating a man in New York and Hank is more than a little perturbed by this.
    Meanwhile, Becca is being her newly sullen and insolent teenage self.

ANALYSIS: The writer has taken an interesting approach and has given us a glimpse into Hank's internal dialogue. Once again though, the "Karen dating someone new" scenario has been already covered in the show, so there is a lack of originality of plot. On the whole I didn't find this story to be entirely captivating, with no real climax or anything to stimulate the readers interest in the story or creating any compassion for the characters. It needs far more satire to be more in keeping to Hank's character and how he would think, and with the show in general. This would make a far more interesting and a better paced read.

3) Road To Damascus by Stephen Greenwood
    An ongoing series of vignettes detailing Hank and Karen's lives during her
    pregnancy in 1994. This story is made up of 4 parts:
    1. "It's Better To Burn Out Than Fade", 2. "Fill Your Paper",
    3. "My Kingdom For A Horse" and 4. "A Kind Of Poetry".

ANALYSIS: These 4 short stories make up a beautifully written, emotive, evocative, romantic and dreamy narrative that really captivates the reader, giving a sensual and vivid description of all the scenarios and characters. The writer has a very mature style of writing, wonderfully constructed with great usage of popular culture icons to set the period and age of the characters (Kurt Cobain, John Lennon, Jimmy Stewart). The stories are short and extremely effective with a beautiful rhythm. Technically the stories are superb.

4) Tangled Up in Blue and Other Misdemeanours by Stephen Greenwood
    Once Karen leaves LA, it's all down to Hank to keep it together and look after his
    daughter Becca, while his world continues to fall apart.
    This story is in 2 parts: 1. "Tangled Up In Blue" and 2. "And Other Misdemeanours".

ANALYSIS: The first part of the story "Tangled Up In Blue" is a compelling take on what would happen if Hank was forced to have to look after Becca. The story is melancholic and wonderfully descriptive and stays true to Hank's and Becca's characters. You really feel Hank's desolation at Karen's leaving and see him becoming reflective, and it gives a realistic sense of how Becca would treat the situation. In contrast, the second part tells of the breakdown of Hank's and Becca's father-daughter relationship. While the writing is still descriptive, it is far too long and tedious to read through. It is disappointing to note that "And Other Misdemeanours" is basically put together from different scenes from the show, using exact dialogue and scenarios, making the originality close to zero.

5) Nirvana by Stephen Greenwood
    Set during the flashback to 1994 when Hank deals with Karen's pregnancy.

ANALYSIS: This story captivates the reader with its vivid descriptions and dreamy flashback sequence. You really feel empathic with both Hank's and Karen's characters, and gives a sense of the intense internal turmoil they both are going through as they come to grips with the reality of pregnancy. Beautifully written, with emotive and evocative use of language, the writer stays true to both characters.

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I'd like to explore the idea of a role reversal between Hank Moody and Karen van der Beek, his long-term on-and-off again girlfriend and mother of his daughter, Becca... Karen being wild and irresponsible, and Hank being judgemental and sensible. Either that or the idea of Karen giving in to temptation/the dark immoral side of life....

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TITLEPAIN


Karen van der Beek

CHARACTER'S:
Karen van der Beek, Hank and Becca Moody, Derek.

SCENE:
Late night in a nightclub in Los Angeles.

PLOT OUTLINE:
Hank and Becca have moved back to New York. Karen has gone off the rails and is out at a nightclub doing drugs with a man she has just met named Derek. Karen is tormented by everything that's recently happened leading up to Hank's and Becca's departure. In her quest to try and forget and quell the pain, Karen accidentally overdoses.

P.O.V:
This is written in the third person.

STORY:

Karen looked around.

Coloured lights flashing. Loud music blaring. Bodies moving rhythmically to the beat. She felt hot. Flushed. Her heart beat wildly in her chest. She felt clammy. Thirsty. Her head hurt. Her teeth kept grinding together and her tongue stuck to the roof of her mouth. She couldn't swallow, her nose and back of her throat were numb, as were her front teeth.

She was fidgety. She wanted another hit. Another line. Anything to make her forget. What was it that he had said? She couldn't remember just now. The cocaine made her numb.

THINK! She couldn't. Her hands were twitching, palms sweating. She looked at the table. Several perfect 6cm white lines of powder neatly in a row and a rolled up dollar bill. She took the make shift straw and put it in her nose, snorting two of the white lines.

Ah, that's better. Her heart began to race even more. She could no longer sit still. She looked to Derek. Derek who she only met tonight. Derek who she was relying on to take her pain away. But he was too busy chatting to someone over the back of the seat in the booth next to them.

Hank was gone. Becca too. She was ruined. Her world torn apart. It was too much for her to bare. How did it come to this?

It was Hank who was out of control. Hank who was the addict. Drugs, sex, alcohol. That was Hank's thing. But then he got clean. He got sane. And he got himself as far away from her as possible, taking their daughter with him. Back to New York. Back home. Back to where they first started, leaving her all alone in L.A.

Karen needed a drink. Something to take the edge off. She grab the bottle of champaign from the ice bucket next to the table, poured herself a glass and quickly sculled it back. She did this a second time, feeling the warmth of alcohol spread through her.

She never meant to go this far. She never meant to loose herself like this. She just wanted to show Hank what he was doing to her and Becca and give him back some of his own. She only meant to go out, go wild for a week or two till Hank came to his senses. And to that end she had certainly succeeded.

He went cold turkey, sobered up, changed his life. And the irony? She couldn't stop. She had become the addict.

It was just such a good antidote to the pain. All the pain and emotional turmoil that life had put her through.

But now she had lost them both. And herself.

AARRGH! She shook her head. Stop thinking about it! She stood up, unsteady on her feet, not knowing where she was going. She suddenly had to get out of this place. She was beginning to feel claustrophobic, the walls had started to close in. But she didn't want to leave. She didn't want to be alone.

YOU ARE ALONE! She told herself. SO UTTERLY AND MISERABLY ALONE. A VICTIM OF YOUR OWN GAME PLAYING. A GAME YOU PLAYED AND LOST!

Karen stumbled to the bathroom. She need some peace. She was feeling incredibly nauseous. She went to the mirror and stared at her reflection. Her mascara had run. She looked like shit. Her nose had begun to bleed. FUCK I'M A MESS! I MESSED UP! OH FUCK!

She turned on the tap and tried to clean up herself up. Her nausea was getting worse and her head was dizzy. She clutched onto the edges of the sink, put her head down watching the water whirlpool down the plughole. The ends of her hair were getting wet. She didn't care.

Suddenly the room started to spin and Karen threw up. Beads of sweat formed all over her body. She tried to keep herself propped up on the sink, but she couldn't hold her weight. She slid to the floor as she vomited again, her body trembling.

She curled up into a tight ball on the floor. She couldn't breath. Her nose was bleeding profusely. “Help! Somebody please..” She tried to to call out, but her voice came out a whisper. It's all she could muster.

She began silently sobbing to herself. Images of Hank floated through her mind. There had been so much love, once. There had always been laughter. She always believed they would get back together, grow old together, once Hank sorted his shit out.

And Becca, oh God, beautiful Becca, the product of their love. She had always thought she'd been a good mother to her. They were each other's anchor while Hank was off sleeping around, partying, neglecting them.

But none of that mattered now. Karen was writhing on the bathroom floor, shaking, frothing at the mouth. She realised she had overdosed. But she was helpless. She had tunnel vision, the room was darkening.

She begins to loose consciousness. Suddenly, she remembers what Hank had said before he left.

"I can't bare to watch you be who I was. I have failed you. You have failed me. We only hurt each other. So we obviously can't be together. Ever.”

Karen's heart aches with pain. Everything goes black. Her body stills as a single tear falls down her cheek.

THE END