Gemma's Fan Fiction draft/plan

Fan Fiction website.
Breakfast Club.
Alice in Wonderland.

Adventure Time and Regular show cross over. yeeees.

I was thinking of doing this cross over, but having it based in regular show and have Finn The Human and Jake The Dog come into The Regular Show world as if it is them coming into reality. I'm not sure if I will still have Mordecai and Rigby living in this world as themselves, or if I will just cut them.
Not sure if i will base this on an original episode yet, maybe Finn and Jake can save the day as they do Adventure time.


Links:
My secret daughter.
Summary Benson is left hard and cold after the mushroom war. It didn't do him any good. He had to shoot down innocent men. That was 10 years ago. Now Benson must contain everything and work as a manager for a park, bottling up the war. When a daughter he never knew about comes back, he must be the best father a man can be.
Critical Evaluation: I find this writing style interesting, I like how it is told by Benson as he is retelling the events of the day, however as it gets further into it I find that the short sentences turn into paragraphs, which changes the way it all looks and sounds. One think I didn't like too much was the fact that the story went back in time, it took away from the original story line and at first I was left a little confused. I am also not too sure how the title fits in with the story line. All in all, I didn't really enjoy reading this.

Sour Gumballs
Summary Princess Bubblegum is once again left in pieces. There's not enough left of her to make her 18, and the Candy people, save Dr. Ice Cream have gone missing. In search of candy flesh, Finn and Jake go to the Regular Show universe using PB's new invention.  
Critical Evaluation: This story line relates to mine as it is about teleporting to another dimension, and the way it is written is similar to my writing style as well, I feel this story would be a good one to use as a guideline because they are relatable. However I do think it needs more 'punch' as I find it drags on a bit, it needs some humour to really keep the audience involved.

Somewhere safe
Summary Mordecai's on the Run from Benson through the House, when Pop's shows him a delivery he got in the mail. It leads him to a certain Vampire Queen.
Critical Evaluation: This style of writing is much like the others, I like it though as it is easy on the eye; it makes it feel as though you aren't reading too much. That writing style draws the reader in. I am finding a real pattern with the story lines all having a transportation device, as this is the idea I have for my FanFic i may be ablt to use these are good guidelines.

Adventure Time with Mordecai and Rigby.
Summary Benson gives all the workers the summer off! But something weird starts happening and Mordecai and Rigby get transported to the land of ooo find out what happens
Critical Evaluation: I like the idea of this story line, however it is too short. I like how they are teleported to The Land of Ooo, as it isn't the same as the others, it is a real different approach. However I don't like the writing style, as they change lines when a sentence isn't complete. It draws away form the story because there isn't a constant flow. The sentences are chopped.

Part 2 of Adventure Time with Mordecai and Rigby.
Summary The gang are almost to Princess Bubble Gum find out how it goes! 
Critical Evaluation: I have the same opinion about this FanFic as i did the last one, because this is the second part. They are both too short and not a lot happens, before you know it the story is over before it has begun. I think both these FanFic's should be put into one as they really aren't complete different parts. I'm not too sure what the writer was trying to accomplish with this but u don't like it.

Legends of the underworld.
Summary The park and the entire city is being infested by zombies once again. Mordecai, Rigby and the rest of the gang now get help from a boy with a white bear hat and a yellow bulldog with magical powers. This is probably the first crossover where the characters don't know each other at all.
Critical Evaluation: This FanFic engaged my interest fast, I wanted to keep reading, however it was finished in a matter of seconds. I also did not like the way Finn and Jake were introduced, I like that they were acting the hero's from the get go, however they just needed to have more 'pow' in the way they came into the story. It felt as if they didn't really know how to introduce them, so that thought they would just have them walk in.

  Plot: Mordecai and Rigby, a Blue Jay standing tall and a short brown raccoon with a ring tail like a lema. ( The Regular Show) have been asked to do a job by their boss Benson as usual, but something happens along the way, they get sucked into a teleporter; and arrive in The Land of Ooo, where they stumble across Finn the Human and Jake the Dog (Adventure Time).

POV: Third person

Genre: Ironic cartoon, animation, comedy




Draft:

It was a lovely day in the park, dogs chasing Frisbees, green grass blowing gently in the summer breeze when...

"Clean Skips' garage or you're fired!" 

Moredcai and Rigby were being screamed at once again by their boss Benson, A little red bubble gum dispenser, looking like he's about to blow a fuse.

"Oh man, I just want to eat pizza, let’s throw a pizza party! We do the best pizza parties" said Rigby.

"Dude, Benson is for real this time; we have to clean the garage" Morcedcai said.

When they arrive at Skips' house they see the garage is overflowing with rubbish, but "what is that in the back? That shiny thingy" says Mordecai.

"Dude, let's check it out" said Rigby.

As the get closer they start seeing the words T-E-L-E-P-O-R "Dude, it's a teleporter! Let's use it, please, please, please." Rigby said.

 Rigby presses the big red power button 'click' whoosh, whoosh the machine starts up.

"WHERE SHOULD WE GO?" they each scream over the horrendously loud noise. 

"I'm just gonna push some buttons and see where we go, scream for OK" Rigby said. 

"WHAT?" screamed Mordecai 'beep, beep, beep' "WHAT ARE YOU DOING? YOU DON'T KNOW HOW TO WORK THAT THING!" The machine starts shaking, a bright light appears, 

And 

"WHERE DID THEY GO? THEY WERE SUPPOSED TO BE CLEANING SKIPS' GARAGE!" Benson bellows.

"Dude, where are we?" Says Rigby

"Dude, why did you do that? Now we don't know where we are and Benson in going to fire us!" Mordecai says angrily. 

"This place is so colourful and weird" Says Mordecai in awe 

"I don't like it" Rigby says. 

"Should we go explore?"

"Might as well" Mordecai says.

Mordecai and Rigby have been transported to The Land of Ooo. It's covered in green mountains rolling down into the fields, filled with an abundance of villages. These aren't any normal villages as Mordecai and Rigby are about to find out.

The Land of Ooo seems to be the aftermath of a mushroom war. It is a post-apocalyptic earth, with bits of modern technology spread across the land, from the rolling green mountains to the icy peaks of Ice Kingdom.

"Dude, what's that over there?" Mordecai says

"It's just a tree, nothing special" Says Rigby

"Nah dude, it has windows" Mordecai replies

"It's a house! Should we go inside?"

At that moment, what seemed to be a boy and a dog came running out of the tree. The boy had shinning blonde hair covered by a white beanie with ears of a bear and the dog was really elastic and as yellow as a yoke.

"Ahh! Who are you? What do you want?" Finn the Human asks

"Yeeeaaah" says Jake the Dog with a pondering face

"We, we, we are Mordecai and Rigby" says Mordecai

"We came through this portal thing and we don't know how to get back" says Rigby

"Who are you?" asks Mordecai

"I'm Finn and he's Jake" says Finn

Jake whispers to Finn "I don't trust these guys; I mean look at them, a talking Bird and a talking Raccoon, something just not right".

Rigby says "uh we can hear you talking about us".

Finn says "Oh he wasn't talking about you he was talking about uh th-"

"You don't need to lie, but anyway you can trust us" Mordecai interrupts with a cheesy grin.

"Okay" says Finn cheerfully

"We can help get you back-"

"But first we need a teleporter, Get me an apple pie, a big satellite dish looking thing and a microwave" interrupts Jake

"Okay we'll be back" says Rigby

"We found an apple pie on a ladies windowsill, this broken microwave looking thing and a dish right? We found this metal bowl"

"Will this work?" asks Mordecai

"I just wanted an apple pie, I can't make a teleporter" Says Jake

"Why did you make us get that stuff then?" says Rigby in Anger

"Because you wouldn't have brought me an apple pie otherwise".

"We were just off to see one of our friends, when you guy's showed up at our house, maybe she can help with your problem, and she’s really smart"

"And she's a Princess!" Jake Proclaims

"That would be great! Cause you see all we were doing was cleaning out this guy's garage because our boss made us, and now here we are". Explains Mordecai

Rigby mumbles under his breathe "I don't know, they might be trying to kill us now, that dog gives me the creeps"

"We are nearly at Candy Kingdom, but I must warn you, DON'T EAT THE CANDY PEOPLE! Or I will have to kill you" Says Finn

"Dude, are you alright? Candy people, you're starting to sound a little crazy" Says Mordecai with a hint of fear.

"You'll see" says Finn

"Hi Peppermint Butler, we came to See PB and we brought some friends, where's she at?" Says Finn

"That's the princess, Princess Bubble-gum" explains Jake

Rigby shouts "CAAND-"

"NO!" shouts Mordecai "THEY'RE PEOPLE!"

"But I want candy" sulks Rigby

"Okay... Finn she's in the lab" says Peppermint Butler with fear in his voice as he runs away

"Hey PB!"

"Hey Finn"

"What are you doing?"

"Oh I'm just testing the chemical reaction between Sodium and water in chlorine gas"

"Uh cool" Finn says with a puzzled look on his face

"Anyway we brought our friends they need to back to-"

"THE PARK!" interrupts Mordecai and Rigby

"Where is the park?" asks PB

"Park Av 300" says Mordecai

"How did you get here anyway? To The Land of Ooo I mean"

"We had to clean out this guy's garage that we work with because our boss was screaming at us, and if we didn't he would fire us. We found a teleporter in the garage and well you know the rest" says Mordecai

"Lucky I have a teleportation device sitting around her somewhere"

"Finn and Jake stand away from the teleportation device you don't want to be sucked in"

Princess Bubble-gum mumbles as she presses buttons "Park Av 300" 

"Okay, it's ready to go, stand in front of it and when it opens a portal walk in".

"Thanks, If you guys wanna come see us sometime you can, I don't think Benson will mind" Says Rigby

"Cool, we'll see you then" says Finn

The teleporter starts shaking and making the same whoosh sound as the one in Skips' garage, a portal opens and a bright light shines through.

"Well, see ya" Mordecai and Rigby say

"Bye!" Finn, Jake and Princess Bubble-gum wave

Time flies past Mordecai and Rigby eyes; they see old memories and clocks changing time at the speed of light.

"We're home!" Yells Rigby

"Let's never do that again" says Mordecai

"Agreed"

"Where have you two been?" Benson screams from inside the house

"We went to this place, and there was this boy and this dog, and candy peop-" says Rigby

"We were playing with Skips old toys, sorry Benson" Mordecai interrupts

"Actually Benson" says Skips in his husky manly voice with a hint of wisdom "there is an old teleporter in my garage and the boys got sucked into it, it's faulty and needs to be destroyed"

"You guys are lucky Skips was here, otherwise you would have been fired" exclaims Benson

"Yuss! So how about that pizza party?" says Rigby

"Right after you have cleaned out Skips' Garage" Benson says "you weren't getting out of it that easily"

                                                         The End