Tama's Fan Fiction draft/plan

"Eat me, Drink me, Inject me"


Setting 

Wonderland
Back Alleys

Characters

Alice
The White Rabbit
Her Heart (Queen Of Hearts)
Chesch


Links 

Wonderland

Critical Evaluation: I find this story interesting and that it relates to my idea of Alice being an outcast but also being troubled, I like the general idea of Alice being different, the writing style is really well done and the way it is written is similar to my writing style, I feel this would be a good guide line to go by because the story express Alice in a different light then usual.

Underworld Wonderland Poem

Critical Evaluation: I like the idea of combining the Underworld with Alice in Wonderland because of the contrast of the two. Alice in Wonderland is child's movie but giving it aspects of the Underworld made me interested because of my own interest in a darker side of things and I like the idea of showing Wonderland in a dark sense. The writing style isn't really to my liking because it just feels like a novel and the actual layout of the lines just makes it hard for me to keep focus. I do not want to write in a similar layout of this fanfic.

My Fault

Critical Evaluation: Its short and sweet, the writing style is appealing because its easy to read and stay interested, the actual context of the poem paints a picture in the readers head so I also want to lure the reader in and paint visuals in their minds. This is going to be a good reference for my writing.


Keep Dreaming

Critical Evaluation:

Return

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Plot

Alice is a troubled teenager and after the events in Wonderland she has resorted to drugs to deal with her memories and to get lost once again, "Wonderland" is an alternate reality within Alice's mind and her high takes her there, the white rabbit is the drug she smokes and once in wonderland a rabbit like figure appears made of smoke and is her guide around her mind, her ultimate goal is to over come her addiction and free herself of her past.

*New Plot

Its told from Alice's point of view, dated after her trip to wonderland, meets Chesch in a alley. Takes Drugs goes to wonderland etc.
- Still uses a lot of the first plots background.
- Her actual heart plays the role of the Queen of Hearts

Draft

-Opening Poem
*Needs to be cut down

Dear little Alice, please don’t cry. Tears of woe won’t help you get by. I know you feel scared, lost and alone. Since you cannot find your way back home. Have strange things happened, is there anything I need to know? Did you taste things that made you shrink or.. grow? Did you suffer any.. please, say it isn't so. I will help you out, just wait and see. You’ll be glad you found a cat.. like me. I will show you around this fascinating place but only if you keep a smile on your face. No more reading signs that say ‘This way’ or ‘Yonder’. Now you don’t have to sit down and try to ponder which way should you go, you ask? I seem to find that a very simple task. Just follow my grin for you will know soon how much it looks like a glowing crescent moon. Don’t be afraid please, follow my advice. Surely you don’t need to think twice. Oh look there’s the queen all dressed in red. Hear how she screams “Off with your head!” Those are the very words everyone dreads. Would you like to keep your head? Quick Alice! Run! The cards are after you. Run through this door. I’ll protect you. Dry your eyes Alice because there’s no time to cry. You’ll see me again as the years come flying by. And just when you think this might be the end… never forget that in your heart… you’ll always be my friend. 

DRAFT

"Dear little Alice, please don’t cry, tears of woe won’t help you get by.

I know you feel scared, lost and alone. Since you cannot find your way back home.

Have strange things happened, is there anything I need to know?

Did you taste things that made you shrink or grow? Did you suffer any... please, say it isn't so. I will help you out, just wait and see, you’ll be glad you found a cat... like me."

That was the first thing that Chesch ever said to me when I met him down the dark alley on that humid day, he was a stranger. Yet the scars on his face and big green eyes seemed so familiar, there was something about the way he danced towards me that lured me to him.

"What’s wrong Alice don’t you remember me? I thought the time we once spent together meant something to you? Don’t you remember all the fun we had?”

He was insane, completely mad but I couldn’t stop staring into his eyes.
Those eyes, big green eyes.

I don’t understand what you’re talking about? We’ve never met before nor spent any time together, I claimed as I started to walk away from him

“Suppressing all the memories really must have taken its toll on your poor mind, don’t you feel exhausted, worn out, trying to obey all the orders that are forced upon you“

A little… I muttered.

“What about the rabbit. Don’t you miss him?”

I froze.
What rabbit was he talking about and why did all this feel so familiar.
“What rabbit are you talking about?” as I turned to face Chesch.
Those eyes, big green eyes; had me in a kind of trance, what was he talking about. Was there really memories that I’ve suppressed but how can I not remember suppressing my own memories? It didn’t make sense but I wanted to know more.
He grinned as he danced around me.

“I knew you weren’t weak, now don’t you worry your pretty little head about anything all will become clear with the help of this”
He swayed towards me then reached into his jacket and pulled out a syringe filled with black liquid and printed on it was a white outline of a rabbit.

What is this? I asked.

“It’s the truth, its answers. Your past and your future.”

My past…
His grin was huge almost non-human, but without a thought I got an overwhelming feeling and stabbed the syringe into my arm and injected the black fluid into my arm.

I felt norm-
I spoke to soon, as I fell to my knees everything went blurry and I saw stars…but they weren’t stars they were rabbits. The sound of Cheschs laugh was the last thing I heard as it all faded to black.


I was falling out of sanity and also the sky, I could barely hear my own thoughts with the noise of my heart beating, it almost sounded like a voice screaming to stop and turn back.
But as I approached the ground I wasn’t greeted with an impact on solid ground but with a greeting from an oversized flower that managed to absorb all the power of my fall and convert it into a bounce just like a trampoline.
I was safe I thought to myself, but what is this place. It was a forest filled with the weirdest plants I’ve ever seen. Colourful but strange, beautiful but different. Something was different about this place, as I tried to collect my thoughts and figure out where I was the sound of twisted laughter surrounded me, through a gap in trees the biggest green eyes I have ever seen appeared and underneath them was a grin, not a usual grin but a type of grin that made your spine shiver but I couldn’t stop staring at those eyes. Those big green eyes.

“Welcome home Alice, this is where you truly belong in this paradise”

It was a paradise, Chesch had taken me home. Where home is was uncertain but I liked it here.
Chesch where are we? I asked.
“Why Alice we’re in Wonderland, everything you see her is real, from the talking plants to giant fish”
It was truly a wonderland filled with amazing creatures, for once I felt happy and at home.

We spent what felt like hours walking around the forest exploring, until I stumbled across a small house.
It looked just like a dolls house out of a story book, as Chesch faded away into the shadows I heard a “knock” , so I knocked back and out of nowhere the door flung open and a little white rabbit leapt out and tackled me to the ground.
There I was being taught who’s boss by a rabbit I thought to myself, as I looked at him his eyes I heard the voice again, the same one as before that was telling me to turn back and stop. It was inside my head but where was it coming from, it just kept repeating the phrase, “Stop, turn back. Don’t do any more”.
As I ignored the voice and walked through the forest holding my new pet things started to change…
The trees went from tall and healthy to black and twisted, everything around me was changing.
All of a sudden my new pet let out a high pitched scream like it was in pain but nothing prepared me for what happened to it next…

Its beautiful white fur started to melt off of his skin. At the point I drop him and watch as his skin starts to melt of his muscles, with his deforming body screaming and crawling towards me I scream and run in the opposite direction but my 100 meter dash was cut short by a blind shot to the face.

I wake up in a pile of garbage, I was in the alley way. Was it all a dream? All I knew is that I needed more answers, more of that black liquid.